my first attempt at poetry

[m0loch]

I'd like to see what you think. I can take it.

A synchronizing drumbeat
Tribal?
Stroke!
Haunted by the seven salesmen
Latchkey children squared
Stroke!
A car, a pill. Fits the bill.
MTV’s aborted children
Stroke!
Orchestrated drama
Where do I fit in?
Stroke!
Armchair quarterback, sofa senator
Lobotomy lotion
Stroke!
The world is dieing from obsoleted tuberculosis
Rowing the slave ship called capitalism. To a drumbeat of fear

[Thyrd]

/clicks fingers rapidly

You're out there man. In the ether!

[m0loch]

hahahaha

I just got done writing a commentary of it to myself so that I can remember WTF it was I was getting at.

Twisted