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The Avatar
09-11-2005, 05:02 PM
Writing a story.

If anyone wants to read chapter one, feel free to...

I require thoughts and criticism.

Feel free to flame the fuck out of me.
Arcane1
09-11-2005, 05:08 PM
I strongly endorse this thread.
Thyrd
09-11-2005, 05:14 PM
A very good story. The spelling of ganymede is wrong I think. But apart from that I think it's awesome.
The Avatar
09-11-2005, 11:30 PM
Really? It's named after the owner not the star system. All the obital platforms are own by either corporations, relgious sects, or governments.

Im working on chapter two tonight, and will have it up for you guy tomorrow.
eeefreak
09-11-2005, 11:37 PM
does it come in a podcast form so i can impress all the young dudes i work with with my technoskillz?
The Avatar
10-11-2005, 09:05 AM
Does what come in podcast form? Also, WTF is a podcast?
Arcane1
10-11-2005, 09:10 AM
Does what come in podcast form? Also, WTF is a podcast?
You would have to have someone read it aloud, then convert to an MP3. Not a difficult thing to do really.
Thyrd
10-11-2005, 09:28 AM
Really? It's named after the owner not the star system. All the obital platforms are own by either corporations, relgious sects, or governments.

Im working on chapter two tonight, and will have it up for you guy tomorrow.

Ah, I see. Forgive me. I'm not getting enough sleep :p
The Avatar
10-11-2005, 03:11 PM
God damn its hot today. Havent been able to write much so far because its too damn hot to think straight.

I'm going to get some ice cream then get back to it. Im not so happy with chapter 2 as there isn't much action in it, mainly explainations. This is meant to be an action story.